It's not that these scenes are horrible, but as I read them, I wince at some of the--well--the choppiness of it all. Some of the words don't quite fit, the dialogue isn't so smooth, the sentences feel fake. It doesn't take too much effort to fix it up, but to me it just screams AMATEUR.
But this doesn't discourage me. Actually, it makes me feel better. It means I've improved my craft. Perilous was still good enough to get a publisher. And now, I feel like I'm an even greater writer. Which just means my future looks good from here!
And as a reader, you can be excited. If you enjoyed Perilous, my future projects are going to blow you away.
